Some people say that living in high-rise apartments feels very lonely and makes people unhappy. Others say there are advantages to living in a big apartment building. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

In
contemporary
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world and modern urbanization, many individuals prefer to live in high-rise
apartments
or buildings. Some folks believe that an individual who lives in an apartment often
feel
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lonely and
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depressed.
While other
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groups of experts argue that there are more
benefits
to
live
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in high-rise
apartment
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apartments
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as there are more
people
to live
.
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In
this
essay, I will discuss both
merits
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and demerits of living a life in high-rise buildings and later give my opinion. On one hand, there are numerous
benefits
to
live
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in
an
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apartments
or tall buildings.
Firstly
, there are different kind of
people
from different cultures and traditions are live together in building which help an individual to learn and develop new culture and traditions.
Secondly
, there are many
neighbours
available
at
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next
doors
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, so
that
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they can help each other in any crucial
situations
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.
Moreover
,many high-rise
apartments
offer
to
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various facilities
such
as swimming pools
ang
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and
gymnasium, so that members of societies not only just live but
also
benefits
from other recreation facilities.
Thus
, living in
an
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apartments
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apartments
bring lots of facilities and immense
supports
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from
neighbours
, which makes a life happy.
On the other hand
, there are many drawbacks to
stay
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in
an
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an apartment
apartments
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apartments
. In many foreign countries,
people
live by themselves and
not
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make any contact with
neighbours
.
Also
, many individuals prefer to stay silent and live peacefully without having any disturbance. That sometimes
result
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as
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a
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depression or anxiety, because there are living secular life.
In addition
, sometimes
people
have problems with
neighbours
due to
unexpected reading or parking issues, which causes negative
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in
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society. In conclusion, to live in a house or an apartment is a personal choice and preference.
However
, in my opinion, the advantages of living in an
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apartment
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apartments
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outweigh
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more
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than
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the disadvantages
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disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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that an
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individual
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individuals
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can have more
benefits
to live in
apartments
.
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