37.Some people think that cultural traditions will be destroyed when they are used as money-making machines aimed at tourists, other people believes that it is the only way to save such traditions in the world today. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Some say that making money from cultural

tradiction

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tradition

traditions

will destroy their indigenous

culture

,

while

others would argue

that is

a way of rescuing these

traditions

.

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essay would argue that

although

there will be a difference compared to reality, it will allow more

people

to know about their

existance

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existence

. Commercialization can result in the dilution of the authenticity of the

traditions

,

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since they are adapted to the tourists’ tastes and what

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they expect.

This

can lead to misunderstanding about how the

culture

really is. Since when only focusing

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profits, it can cover the real value and meaning of the cultural tradition and why

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individuals really have

this

cultures

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culture

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.

For example

, there is a minority ethnic group in China called Miao Zu, their custom is full of silver decorations, the reason why they dress like

this

is because the higher amount of decoration made of silver or gold

,

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means the richer they are, so when they get married the others know about it, since it said that the richer someone is, the better life they will have. But when

people

get to China and wear these clothes, they do not know the

culture

, the only thing they know is that it looks good.

However

, I believe that

this

can be easily solved by adding some information before

people

try to be involved in another

culture

.

On the other hand

, there are countries that have many cultural

traditions

, but there are some

that

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only followed by a few

people

, because as the years go by, some families are not very

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with

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the

culture

of their ancestors, so they decide to not follow it, causing fewer

people

following these

traditions

. So the possibility of allowing visitors to try their customs and

culture

can let more

people

know about it and save them from extinction. So

communitiescan

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communities can

communities

continue

practicing

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and

perserving

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preserving

their customs, and more tourism can raise awareness and appreciation for these cultural practices.

For instance

, Flamenco is a traditional dance from Spain, there are many special dates

where

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people

dress with the customs, so individuals won’t forget about their

histoy

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history

and make more

people

know about it. I believe

this

point of view is preferable because all

people

should try to preserve the history of their country and of the planet. In conclusion,

although

there can be omissions or only

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details about why some places follow certain

culture

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, it will allow

a

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increasing number of individuals to know about the history, tradition and

culture

of that country, and

this

is why it is more important to allow tourists to follow and learn about cultural

traditions

.