37.Some people think that cultural traditions will be destroyed when they are used as money-making machines aimed at tourists, other people believes that it is the only way to save such traditions in the world today. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Some say that making money from cultural

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will destroy their indigenous

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others would argue

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a way of rescuing these

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essay would argue that

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there will be a difference compared to reality, it will allow more

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to know about their

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existence

. Commercialization can result in the dilution of the authenticity of the

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since they are adapted to the tourists’ tastes and what

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they expect.

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can lead to misunderstanding about how the

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really is. Since when only focusing

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profits, it can cover the real value and meaning of the cultural tradition and why

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individuals really have

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, there is a minority ethnic group in China called Miao Zu, their custom is full of silver decorations, the reason why they dress like

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is because the higher amount of decoration made of silver or gold

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means the richer they are, so when they get married the others know about it, since it said that the richer someone is, the better life they will have. But when

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get to China and wear these clothes, they do not know the

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, the only thing they know is that it looks good.

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can be easily solved by adding some information before

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try to be involved in another

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, there are countries that have many cultural

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, but there are some

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only followed by a few

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, because as the years go by, some families are not very

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the

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of their ancestors, so they decide to not follow it, causing fewer

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following these

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. So the possibility of allowing visitors to try their customs and

culture

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can let more

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know about it and save them from extinction. So

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communities can

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continue

practicing

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and

perserving

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preserving

their customs, and more tourism can raise awareness and appreciation for these cultural practices.

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, Flamenco is a traditional dance from Spain, there are many special dates

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people

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dress with the customs, so individuals won’t forget about their

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history

and make more

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know about it. I believe

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point of view is preferable because all

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should try to preserve the history of their country and of the planet. In conclusion,

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there can be omissions or only

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details about why some places follow certain

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culture

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, it will allow

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increasing number of individuals to know about the history, tradition and

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of that country, and

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is why it is more important to allow tourists to follow and learn about cultural

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