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discuss the advantage and disadvantage of following the same diet daily or on regular basis

#advantage #diet #basis
There is no denying
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the fact that the topic of consuming
same
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the same
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food
everyday
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 is ubiquitous
due to
it's
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 paramount importance across the globe. One school of thought opine that eating
same
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food
 has
a
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numerous benefits
whereas
 ,other reject
this
 notion and consider that many problems occur because of same.
This
 essay will shed light on both perceptions before reaching
the
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 conclusion. Initiating with the best possible benefits, controlled
inake
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intake
 of the calories is
first
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 and foremost pro of eating
a
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 same
diet
 as a
human-being
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human being
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 can control
intake
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the intake
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 of calories by consuming
food
 that has
less
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 calories on
daily
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a daily
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 basis and that will help an individual to control the
body
 weight.
Thus
, it will help a person to lead a healthy life and it reduces the risk of obesity.
For instance
, in
India
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India,
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 most of the population
eat
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eats
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home made
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homemade
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food
 which is
same
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everday
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everyday
every day
 and the rate of obesity is
lowest
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the lowest
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 in
this
 nation.
Therefore
, a balanced
diet
 intake is
prominent
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important
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 to keep
body
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 healthy.
In addition
,
this
 habit saves money and reduces stress because there is no pressure
of choosing
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different ingredients from various places to make different edible dishes.
Consequently
,
this
 routine proves beneficial for commoners. On the paradoxical side, there are many drawbacks as well.The first one is lack of nutrients as intake of
same
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 type of vegetables or meat could lead to
deficiency
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a deficiency
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 of particular
vitamin
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vitamins
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 in
human
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the human
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body
. To exemplify, vegetables are rich in fibres and vitamins but
have
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lack
of
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fatty acids which can result in
underdeveloped
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an underdeveloped
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 human
body
.
Therefore
, a balanced meal is crucial for a person.
Secondly
, it is boring to consume
same
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 type of
food
everyday
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hence
, variety in
menu
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the menu
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 is important.
As a result
, distinct dishes would provide different nutrients. To recapitulate, without any doubt , it is a mixed bag. No doubt, numerous pros
a
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there yet,
cons
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 can not be ignored as well.
Thus
, a
balance
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diet
 should be a part of
daily
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the daily
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diet
 in order to stay healthy.
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