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In some countries, more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this question?

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The majority of
people
 in the world
are
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desire to be aware of the history and relevant information where we live. The essay
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 discuss the main reasons for
this
 and how can
people
research
this
 information. Basically, there are several reasons
regarding
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why
people
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 to
research
 the history of the houses or buildings where they live . The major one is to relieve their curiosity. Here, they expected to know when was built, who was the first owner and what were events conducted in
this
 place.
On the other hand
,
people
 want to know these details for their self-satisfaction.
Then
, they have a basic idea about their living place. The other reason is, if there would
happened
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 a detrimental and unfortunate situation, they can and have to reverse or re-arrange it.
For example
, if there is a fire explosion, they can re-check their wiring system and sometimes building materials are not durable and it will lead to the worst collapse. In that time,
people
 can renovate their places by using new technology.
Hence
, awareness of the past of our living places is very important and
then
 we can prepare for that if there are unexpected things. There are several ways to
research
 about past of houses and buildings.
Firstly
,
people
 can follow the local building records which
safely
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 stored in the "Local Building Authority". The second option is online
research
 and it is the fastest path. The other way is "word of mouth" and mysteries running through society.
Accordingly
, it is possible to initiate the
research
 by using second and third options. After that, we can prove every detail by using local building records.
Therefore
, there are basically three paths to find out information regarding the past of houses or buildings.
To conclude
,
people
 in most parts of the world have a natural trend to know the history of their living places and there are few ways to know that details.
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Expand on the reasons why people are interested in finding out the history of the house or building they live in. Provide more specific examples or evidence to support your points.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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