The media is increasing interest in famous people who have ordinary backgrounds. Why do you think people are interested in the lives of famous people? Do you think this is a good thing?

Nowadays it is more common that
media
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the media
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try to make
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popular
some
celebritiy charactors
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celebrity characters
, most of them even do not have
good
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a good
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background in their
filed
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field
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. So,
this
trend will bring
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a lot
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of
problem
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problems
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in future. In my point of
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view,
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I think it will not bring any advantage
for
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our
life
. I will discuss
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this in
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this
essay
further
about
this
topic. On the one hand, most
media
use
this
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this person
these people
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people
for
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to
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promote some brands. Their ultimate target is
use
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famouse
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famous
people
for
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to
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sell their
customers
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customer's
customers'
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product
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products
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.
For example
, many celebrities
use
their TicTok
for
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to
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market some brands
such
as cosmatics, food and
cloths
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clothes
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, even if they do not
use
that
product
they will give good
review
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reviews
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for
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the
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audience
such
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apply
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as they used that
product
from
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for
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long
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time.
This
will
misslead
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mislead
customers.
In addition
, most of the famous
peope
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people
use
to show off their daily
life
in
media
, in that they are trying to get more views from
poeple
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people
.
This
will help them to earn an extra income.
For instance
, YouTube is their main
flatform
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platform
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for that, in that, some
famouse
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famous
people
upload weekly, like how they spend their weekend, what they eat,
where
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and where
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they went. Some
people
like
to
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apply
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how
celebritiy
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celebrity
celebrities
charactors
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characters
spend their
life
so, they will have
large
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a large
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number of views for these videos.
However
this
not
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is not
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really, most of them are acting in front of the camera.
Moreover
,
these kind
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this kind
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of
media
will
bring
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a lot of bad
influance
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influence
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for
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on
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people
's
life
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lives
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. Many
of
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people
believe
that is
the reality and they try to maintain
thier
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their
life
also
this
level
eventhough
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even though
they can not afford those things.
Consequently
, there will be a conflict in
thier
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their
family and most
of
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apply
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the poeple
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poeple
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people
live
thier
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their
life
unhappily. As a clear example,
this
will
misslead
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mislead
young
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the young
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generation. After the kids watch some food promotion
programm
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programme
they
wanted
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want
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to buy that
product
wether
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whether
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it is healthy or not. Most of
this
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these
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commercials
shows
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show
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unhealthy foods. In conclusion, I would
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argue
urge
that
media
gives
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has
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bad
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a bad
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influence
for
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on
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young
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the young
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generation and they
weste
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waste
most of their valuable time using
famouse
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famous
people
.
However
,
people
should
more
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be more
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aware
about
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of
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this
kind of trick in
media
and they want to reject these
programms
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programmes
programs
and
media
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • celebrity
  • ordinary backgrounds
  • interest
  • curiosity
  • fascination
  • escapism
  • entertainment
  • inspiration
  • motivation
  • identification
  • relatability
  • social comparison
  • envy
  • public interest
  • negative effects
  • excessive focus
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