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The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of junk food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of junk food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000
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The line graph illustrates
that
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how
Australian
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Australians
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in
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at
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the
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a
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 young age
change
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changed
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 their behaviour
about
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regarding
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 consuming 3 types of fast food, which are
Pizza
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,
Fish
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 and
Chips
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 and
Hapburgers
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Hamburgers
, from 1975 to 2000.
Overall
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, 2 types of fast food
was
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were
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 rocketed which were
pizza
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 and
hamburgers
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.
In
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At
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 the same time,
fish
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 and
chips
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is decrease
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is decreased
is decreasing
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 considerably.
First,
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Pizza
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 was the least popular
in
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among
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Australia
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Australian
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 teenagers in 1975 with less than 10
times
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 eaten per
year
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. Anyway, Its popularity
was
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increased rapidly after 1985 and
be
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was
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 stable in 1995 with around 85
times
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of
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apply
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consumption
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 per
year
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.
Next,
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Hamburgers
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was
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were
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be
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eaten just 10
times
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 per
year
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 in 1975, but the number of
Hamburgers
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consumption
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 was dramatically rose between 1975 to 1985 and afterwards slightly grew since 1985. The
last
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 one is
Fish
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 and
chips
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, which is the only one that
decrease
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decreases
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 in
consumption
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 in
this
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 period. It was
be
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eaten 100
times
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 in a
year
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 in 1975. By the way, the amount of
consumption
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 was fructuated from 1975 until 1985 and it
was sharply dove
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was sharply diving
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 to 40
times
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 of eating
fish
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 and
chips
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 in 2000.
To sum up
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, It is striking that both
Hamburgers
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 and
Pizza
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 were a growth of
popularlity
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popularity
 to consume in Australian teenagers between 1975 to 1995 and it
was
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steadily rose after 1995.
Conversely
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,
Fish
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 and
chips
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was went
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went
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 down abruptly from 100
time
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times
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 a
year
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 in 1975 to just only 40
times
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 a
year
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 in 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pizza, fish, chips, hamburgers, times, year, consumption with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Spike
  • Dip
  • Steady growth
  • Decline
  • Plateau
  • Consumption patterns
  • Fast food
  • Processed snacks
  • Health consciousness
  • Marketing influence
  • Demographic factors
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Nutritional education
  • Epidemiological impact
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