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write a letter to the neurologist , who will attent the patient in the emergency department.

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I am writing to request an assessment and
further
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 management of Mrs Maria who is presenting with signs and symptoms of
intracrancial
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intracranial
 pathology,
space occupying
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space-occupying
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 lesion. Mrs Maria presented on 10
may
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 with complaints of mild Frontal
headache
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 for 6 hours associated with nausea and blurred vision.At that time ,it was suspected
due to
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 excess tension or personal dilemma for which he was prescribed analgesia and advised to take rest. She returned four days later with
detoriating
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deteriorating
 symptoms. At
this
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 subsequent visit,he complained of continuous
headache
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 (
lift sided
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lift-sided
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 and frontal),blurred vision, and throbbing
headache
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 (
left sided
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left-sided
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)
and
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which
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 did not subside despite attempts of rest.
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Additionally
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Additionally,
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 he reported
with
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complaints of vomiting and slightly paraesthesia.A diagnosis of a severe migraine was made and the patient was prescribed Pethidine 100 mg stat and Maxolon 10 mg IM. On
today
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today's
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 home visit ,she was found semi-conscious with slurred speech following a fall
due to
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severe
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a severe
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left sided
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left-sided
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headache
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 .She had injured her right arm and bruises on
left
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her left
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 leg.On observation her BP
150
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was 150
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/90,extension 4/5 power and left leg knee flexion 4/5. I would highly appreciate it
,
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 if you could evaluate his condition and kindly provide urgent treatment for her .If you have any queries ,don't hesitate to contact me.

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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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