The diagram below shows the recycling process of plastics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the recycling process of plastics.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram chart shows how the
plastics
recycling processes are. From the store to reproducing and to
be
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being
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diaplayed
Correct your spelling
displayed
on the shelf again, it contains 6 steps
of
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for
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recycling
plastics
products
.
The first step is
the
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for the
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consumer
purchase
Fix the infinitive
to purchase
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plastics
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plastic
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products
at the shop and use
it
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them
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, some bags and garbages
those
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that
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cannot be recycled
are going
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go
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to
the
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apply
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landfill.
However
, the next steps are collecting and sorting, the plastic bottles are going to
collected
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be collected
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and
then
sorted at the sorting house. After that, the garbage trucks are going to pick them up onto the trucks and transport them to the recycling
manufacture
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manufacturer
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to reprocess those
plastics bottle
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plastic bottles
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to be new
products
.
Finally
, the
last
step is sending them to be displayed at the store again.
To sum up
, the whole
processes
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process
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of recycling
the
Correct article usage
apply
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plastic
products
have
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has
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6 steps which are buying and using by
consumer
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a consumer
the consumer
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, collecting the bottles which are able to be recycled, sorting them to prepare to be transported to reprocessing, transporting them, reprocessing them to be new
products
at the factory and contributing them to the shop again.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words plastics, products with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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