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Should private schools receive government funding? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Introduction
Dose
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Do
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authorities have to
giving
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give
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money to privet
schools
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? I believe
that
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is
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it does
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 not make sense because
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these
thes
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these
 kinds of
schools
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 have money's
resource
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resources
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, I will show in his essay some of
reasons
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the reasons
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that
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why
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governments
movements
govements
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governments
 don't have to pay
to
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for
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privet
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private
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schools
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Body paragraph 1
First of all, students in private
schools
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 pay high fees in exchange
their
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for their
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 services ,
however
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 , private
schools
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 always
provided
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provide
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high quality
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high-quality
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of
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apply
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services
.
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for
for example
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, transportation and
uniform
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uniforms
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 for all students ,
thus
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 they have
independent
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an independent
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 financial system
Body paragraph 2
Secondly
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, there are many public
schools
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 which are
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in poor and rural regions
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that needs
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needs
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need
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 government funds , because
the
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apply
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most
of
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apply
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people are
poorly
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poor
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, mostly
all
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the
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schools
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theirs
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apply
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have weak infrastructures and the education system
don't
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doesn't
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 have appropriate
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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.
thus
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alwys
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always
this
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 regions are needs
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government-supported
govement
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government
 supported
Body paragraph 3
To fix
building
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buildings
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 and
bringing
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bring
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education
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educational
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 tools
Conclusion
In conclusion, we can see
a
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privet schools
a privet school
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privet
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private
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schools
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 having
fund
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funding
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 resources
while
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 public
schools
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 don't have any money resources except government funds , in my experience the
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majority
majoorty
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majority
 of Popular
schools
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 need more care from
theirs
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their
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • government funding
  • private schools
  • public education
  • educational inequality
  • educational choices
  • resources and facilities
  • community benefits
  • competition in education
  • financial aid
  • scholarships
  • socioeconomic backgrounds
  • underfunded
  • dual education system
  • accessibility
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