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some people say that money is a best gift to give it to teenagers. some disagree with it. discuss both views and give your opinion?

#people #money #gift #teenagers #disagree
Nowadays,
youngest
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the youngest
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 use to
celebrade
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celebrate
 their birthdays and
namedays
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name-days
name days
 with
relevants
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relevant
 and friends. Everybody
give
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gives
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money
 as
gift
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a gift
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,
insdeat
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instead
 of clothes,
book
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a book
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 or even a voucher gift cart.From one point of
view
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view,
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this
 is a good present
,
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apply
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 because teenagers can use them to buy what they really need.
On the other hand
, that present gives them the freedom to make
unnesessary
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unnecessary
 buys and
spent
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spend
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 their
money
budly
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badly
. In my essay, I will explain my opinion which is
somewere
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somewhere
 in the middle.
Firstly
, I believe that especially the
relevands
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relevance
has
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have
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 to ask
parents
 if their kid has a need
on
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for
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 clothes, shoes, electronic
devises
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devices
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 and things that will be
usueful
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useful
. If
parents
 give directions they have to accept them and buy something
relevand
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relevant
.
Outherwise
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Otherwise
, they can take what they believe will be better, and
this
 is in majority an
envelop
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envelope
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 with
money
.
Secondly
, if
parents
 believe that the
teenagare
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teenager
teenage
mast
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must
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be ask
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be asked
be asking
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, relevands
has
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have
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 to go in that direction. Sometimes, youths
has
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have
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 so many things
in
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on
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 their mind and even
parents
 don't really
now
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know
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 if there is a real
unseens
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unseen
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 need. In that situation probably the celebration boy or girl
collect
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collects
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 a huge amount of
money
. And
then
 the spending marathon will
be
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apply
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start.
Finally
, if
this
 can't be avoided,
parents
has
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have
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 to take the
money
 and allow
thir
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their
 use only if it is
nesessary
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necessary
 and really needable. To
conlude
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conclude
 with my starting point
money
are
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is
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 good as a gift to teenagers, only with the
suppervision
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support
 and
colaboration
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collaboration
 with their
parents
. If that can be
acheive
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achieved
achieve
, I believe is better to take presents like clothes, shoes, electronics or something that may
be change
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be changed
be changing
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 for something else except
money
.
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