The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002,

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002,
The bar chart illustrates the total number of minutes (in billions) of phone calls in British, halve into local,
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, and national/international between 1995 and 2002.
Overall
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it is clear that
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type
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experienced rises, there were fluctuate in the remaining one.
Furthermore
, local
call
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shared the highest dial
whereas
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all calls had the lowest minutes. Public and global had just below 40 by 1995 and
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up sequentially over the years and outstretched crest well above 60 in
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2002.
Similarly
the
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all calls
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well beyond zero minutes and reached
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at around 40 after
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gradually from 1995 to 2002.
However
, domestic had
such
a fine kick off with well over seventy, surges marginally by four years,
then
stick out sharp 90 by 1999 after surged marginally by 1998.
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, after the shining year,
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movement throughout the years, eventually
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the lowest calls by 2002.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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