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The bar chart below shows the different types of accommodation chosen by the British when they went on holiday in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the different types of accommodation chosen by the British when they went on holiday in 2010.
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The diagrams indicate the different types of accommodation chosen by the
Bristish
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British
 during 2010 of their self-catering, caravan, and hotel in four
religious
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religions
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such
 as England, Scotland, Wales and Northern Ireland.
Overall
, the number of each area most the
bristish
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British
 religious prefer hotel and more
pupular
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popular
 in
there
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their
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countries
. Looking into the details, the proportion of the
england
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England
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 was approximately 20 compared to the part of
scotland
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Scotland
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 that have been
rose
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rosing
rosed
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 up 30
percent
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per cent
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 which
were
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was
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 being choose by the
bristish
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British
 of self-catering followed by northern
ireland
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Ireland
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 that has
least
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the least
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 or
rank
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ranked
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 exactly 10
percent
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per cent
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. It can be seen that 30
percent
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per cent
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 of the caravan people
were being choose
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were choosing
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 rest during their time that rank the second highest was Northern
ireland
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Ireland
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 which the three
countries
were have
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had
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 under 10
percent
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per cent
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.
On the other hand
, most of the four
countries
 have been
chosing
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choosing
chosen
 not to be camping outside
compare
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compared
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 to the hotel that
rank
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ranks
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the
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apply
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first and
have
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has
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 exactly more
that
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than
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 50
percent
 that
being
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is
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 followed by the other three
countries
.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, percent with synonyms.
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