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The bar chart showed the percentage of school children learning to play four different musical instruments (violin, guitar, piano, drums) in 2005, 2010, 2015.

The bar chart showed the percentage of school children learning to play four different musical instruments (violin, guitar, piano, drums) in 2005, 2010, 2015.
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The bar graph presented the
percentage
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 of school children practicing various musical instruments namely violin,
guitar
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,
piano
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 and
drums
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 for 3 different years (2005, 2010, 2015).
Overall
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, we can observe that the
guitar
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 and
piano
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 were the most popular among children with
constantly
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 increasing
percentage
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 of children.
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, the violin and
drums
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 had only a few
percentage
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 of
students
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. The
percentage
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 of
students
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 involved in the
piano
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 and
guitar
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 were neck-to-neck. In 2005, the
piano
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 had
slightly
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 higher number of
students
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 but they both had around 12% of
students
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. A similar trend was observed in 2010, with comparatively increased
difference
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 in the total number of
students
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 involved.
Conversely
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, in 2015, the
guitar
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 was in the lead , having around 41% of
students
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 involved in learning
guitar
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.
Initially
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, in 2005, the
drums
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 were in the
last
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 position among four musical instruments, as approximately only 5% of
students
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 displayed interest in learning
drums
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. No change was observed in 2010, but it gradually made
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the
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progress and around 10% of
students
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 were enrolled in 2015. Unfortunately, the reverse case was observed in violin when compared to the trend of
drums
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, guitar, piano, drums, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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