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Some people believe that government must apply high taxes to provide good public services for everyone. What is your opinion?

#people #government #taxes #services
I have to believe that poor
country
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countries
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 must
to
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take responsibility
by
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for
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yourself
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themselves
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 and stop waiting some help from outside. Because as
i
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 know free chees only in moustrap, so thats mean you got help and you
also
 get dept for some helpful
country
.
Moreover
 some presidents or
another leaders
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 of
poor
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the poor
a poor
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country
 not who they really
is
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are
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, they can take
money
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the money
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 and make their own territory
more and more leaner
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leaner and leaner
leaner
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. I agree with
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the thesis
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thesis
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the thesis
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about
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to
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about
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 helping
poor
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the poor
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countries
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country
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countries
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 and
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trying
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try
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trying
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 to solve their problem, but we have to control all
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the various
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various
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the various
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help
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helps
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help
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, not only
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with money
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money
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with money
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 but
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also a
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the
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a
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the
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people
 who
given
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are given
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this
money
.
Also
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 we must give education
for
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to
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population
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the population
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, give them knowledge about hygiene, about
economy
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the economy
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.
In
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 the same
time
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time,
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i
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I
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good
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apply
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understand why certain
country
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countries
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 transfer
money
 to the poorest regions,
their
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and their
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 goals and aspirations to hide their crime things.They are
cover
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covering
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 it under good
intension
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 and
dont
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don't
 even feel any shame about these manipulations. Of course
exist
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honest and
self-respect
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self-respecting
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 leaders who try to make
world
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the world
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 better, try to improve all human beings,
maintain
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and maintain
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 peace in
region
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the region
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.
Develop
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country
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countries
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as well
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also
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 get benefits when helping destitute
people
, like
experience
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experiencing
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 what can probably
happend
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happened
happen
with
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to
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 your own
country
 if you let corrupt
people
too
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have too
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 much power.
Besides
 poor and miserably
people
 inside poor
country
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countries
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,
exist
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there exist
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 smart and talented persons who can immigrate to your
country
 and
trying
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try
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 to make
develop
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the development
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 statement richer and more
develop
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developed
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,
attract
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attracting
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a
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apply
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new
ones
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apply
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potential
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potentially
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usefull
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useful
immigrant
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immigrants
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 as well. All we need is balance in everything
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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