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Some people think that all university student should study whatever they want. Other believe that they should only be allowed to study subject that will be useful in the future such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Sea
level
rise
 (SLR) is one of the global warming issues that has recently been discussed in various circles ranging from
lay people
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 to researchers.
Sea
level
rise
 in 1993-2009 using satellite data was 3.2 ± 0.4 mm year-1 and 2.8 ± 0.8 mm year-1 using tidal data (Church and White 2011 in Testut et al. 2016). Seas are predicted to
rise
 by 2 meters or more by the end of the 21st century. The Intergovernmental Panel on Climate Change (IPCC) in its Fifth Assessment Report (AR-5) estimated that SLR will reach 0.8-2.0 m by the end of the 21st century (Jennath et al. 2021). Approximately 12
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 of the current global population living in coastal zones is highly dependent on marine products for subsistence (Hardy and Hauer 2018). Coastal areas will sink massively
due to
 the advancement of coastlines in coastal areas and increased erosion around them (Murali and Kumar 2015). The impact of coastal degradation is the loss of native habitats, tidal flooding, and agricultural land
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 dysfunctional.
As a result
, people living in coastal areas will experience massive migration
due to
 the SLR phenomenon. There are 2 main factors of
sea
level
rise
, namely: 1.Increase in the volume of
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due to
 thermal expansion of the ocean as it warms. Thermal expansion can occur in the ocean. If the
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 warms up, the
sea
level
 will increase. 2. Increase in the mass of water in the ocean
due to
 the melting of ice from mountains and layers in Antarctica and Greenland.
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