using animals to test the safety of cosmetic or drugs used for medical reasons is never acceptable. To what extent do you agree with this statement.

#animals #test #safety #drugs

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things that I must and need to bring as a delegate, individual, and duet. What I will do as an individual is to generate

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that I will do by looking at the big theme of COP28. The

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that are obtained will certainly be right on target considering the idea is related to climate change

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happening today. The importance of being a delegate

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does not escape my obligations so

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have to be conveyed and discussed. The role and

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input and suggestions to the delegates.

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, as a duet, combining the two

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of a partner is certainly a very mandatory thing to do because it can open up the perspective of each individual from the problems brought. The differences that occur will lead to good things because they will learn to complement each other.

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need to care about the

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of COP28 so my task after the post-conference is to disseminate the approval

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that I get to the

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for

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review. The

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obtained will certainly be very useful because they can find out which areas are of concern to be addressed in climate change from COP28. Of course, the capacity of

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will increase so that green

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will be born from all corners of the world based on the

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of COP28.

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invite

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to collaborate with various communities to form real actions that have a big impact. It will be good for

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to keep working at any time to support a better earth. The

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thing I will do is to prevent climate change by campaigning on social media that I have, namely the "Jurnal Iklim" website and Instagram "@jurnaliklim".

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for Indonesia at COP28.

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coherence cohesion

The essay does not sufficiently address the given task. Make sure to focus on whether using animals to test the safety of cosmetics or drugs for medical reasons is acceptable or not.

coherence cohesion

Ensure that there is a clear introduction and conclusion in the essay.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

333 words

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