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Smartphone addiction is a very serious problem. Smartphone addiction can caused many problem. Young people are addicted with smartphone addiction. Now give your opinion and illustrates how to solve this problem ?

#smartphone #addiction #people
increase understanding of the dangers of
SLR
, elevate buildings so that they are not flooded, and create channels that lead directly to the sea so that floods do not inundate the land. What I will do is adapt and
mitigation
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 of
SLR
 that occurs by adopting from various countries that have done things to prevent
SLR
 is making policies of raising dikes around the land, reclamation
,
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 and limiting from sucking groundwater.
In addition
, what I will do is plant mangroves to resist abrasion on the seafront, build embankments to prevent flood water from rising inland, and provide education to the community about adaptation
due to
SLR
. My current efforts are to provide knowledge and campaign about the dangers of
SLR
 for coastal areas.
In addition
, in 2021, I
also
 conducted a survey to see how severe the damage caused by
SLR
 is on the north coast of Pekalongan.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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