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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding about the history of the house or building the live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

#countries #people #history #house #live #research
The maps depict the blueprint of the current and
future
plan
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 of the city. To commence with, it is observed that the
air field
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 is located on
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the north
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north west
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north-west
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 side and a roundabout is middle of
layout
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whereas
gas
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 station is located west side.
Moreover
, a railway line
take
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 place in
northeast
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the northeast
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 site and the town centre is connected with the
road
.
However
, the ring
road
 area
constructed
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 in
middle
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 of
northeast
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 site. Moving forward with the layout of the
future
 plan,
a
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 industrial estate will be constructed and
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the air
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air field
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 removed completely.
Additionally
, between the
road
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road,
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 a circle will be connected
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the
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to the
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 town centre and a
rounddabout
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roundabout
 circle. Eventually, a ring
road
 area will not
destroy
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 and
remove
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removed
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 in
future
. To give an overview, it is observed that there are only
few
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 changes made in
proposed
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 plan as compared to the present layout. a railway line will not change it remained same in
future
wheareas
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whereas
 a roundabout circle will
removed
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remove
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.
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The essay does not fully address both parts of the prompt. It mentions the reasons for the growing interest in history, but does not discuss how people can research it. Make sure to address all aspects of the prompt in your essay.
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The essay lacks a clear overall structure. Make sure to have a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Additionally, use topic sentences in each paragraph to guide the reader.
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The essay lacks clear and specific examples to support the main points. Try to provide specific examples or evidence to illustrate your ideas.
grammar
There are several grammar errors in the essay. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement, verb tenses, and sentence structure. Consider reviewing grammar rules and practicing writing sentences to improve your accuracy.
vocabulary
The essay lacks a strong range of vocabulary. Try to use a variety of words and phrases to express your ideas more effectively. Consider using synonyms or different sentence structures to avoid repetition.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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