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Living at a place far from your native land will be difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

#place #land
Inhabate
mean
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 the
place
 where
people
 live.
Local
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place
 where
people
born
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are born
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in
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apply
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and grow up in it. Living
at
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in
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same
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the same
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 local
place
affect
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affects
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on
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apply
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people
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people's
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 culture. In
this
essay
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essay,
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 we will give you some examples of benefits for
people
 when they live in their
inationaly
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national
nationally
place
. In the
begining
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beginning
 when any body
raise
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raised
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 in
same
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the same
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place
 generally they get
same
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the same
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 behaviour, support each other when they need
, know
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to, know
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 each other well, can borrow things from each other, accept
people
 a culture,
every one
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everyone
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 will be kind to avoid
sight
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the sight
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 of other neighbours. They feel as
they
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if they
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 are a family.
Instance
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, my father
born
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was born
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 in Saudia Arabia and raised in the same
place
, when he graduated from school there was poverty because
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of deforstration
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deforstration
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deforestation
 and drying
that
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apply
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cause
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caused
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 less production of
fruites
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fruits
,
vegtabels
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vegetables
, cereals, meat and
daietry
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dairy
.
In
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At
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 that time my father's neighbours helped him to avoid death by
gave
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giving
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 him some
foods
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food
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 and water
for
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to
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 drink because he lost his job and
has
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had
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 a big family. If he lived in non native land he would
saffer
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suffer
 from
deal
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dealing
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 with
people
 to get help. So, he was lucky to live in his home. Generally, I agree
of
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with
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 living in
different
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a different
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 land but there
some
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are some
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 advantages
in
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to
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 living
out side
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outside
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 of
home
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my home
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 country. Living
out side
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outside
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 makes
people
 strong,
have
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and have
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a varity
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varity
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variety
 of
experiance
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experiences
.
Overall
, living in
same
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the same
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place
give
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gives
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people
 feel
relax
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relaxed
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, safe and happy. Go away from
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the problem
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problem
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problems
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 and
headache
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headaches
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 of
live
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life
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.
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