The chart below compares the percentage of time Australian mothers and fathers spent helping their children with four activities in 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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the spending of time to assist children in Australia by Change the verb form
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father
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mother
in 2013. Which involve Use synonyms
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this activities
; dressing, homework, playing Change the determiner
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games
and preparing for bed.
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games
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father
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who consumed only 3%. Correct article usage
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reached 70% for playing Use synonyms
games
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