The chart below compares the percentage of time Australian mothers and fathers spent helping their children with four activities in 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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match
the spending of time to assist children in Australia by Change the verb form
matches
father
and mother
in 2013. Which involve this activities
; dressing, homework, playing Change the determiner
this activity
these activities
games
and preparing for bed.
Overall
, the most
percentage was the dressing by Correct word choice
highest
mother
. However
, the high rate which include
both Wrong verb form
included
father
and mother
was playing games
. While
the low one was the dressing activity by father
.
Correct article usage
the father
According to
the shape, the mother
spending
70% of Wrong verb form
spends
time
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the time
to
dressing the kids and there Change preposition
apply
are
a big difference Change the verb form
is
with
Change preposition
between
father
who consumed only 3%. Correct article usage
the father
In
addition
the homework exercise had Add a comma
addition,
similar
percentage with dressing but in Correct article usage
a similar
lower
proportion.
Both Correct article usage
a lower
mother
and father
reached 70% for playing games
with children as the highest number consumed toghter
. Correct your spelling
together
While
there were
the same rate for preparing for bed but lower than playing Change the verb form
was
games
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