The bar chart below shows the different types of accommodation chosen by the British when they went on holiday in 2010.
The bar chart matches the spending of time to assist children in Australia by dad and mom in 2013. Which involve these activities; dressing, homework, playing
games
and preparing for bed.
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Overall
, the highest percentage was the dressing by mom. Linking Words
However
, the high rate which included both dad and mom was playing Linking Words
games
. Use synonyms
While
the low one was the dressing activity by the father.
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According to
the shape, the mother spends 70% of the time dressing the kids and there is a big difference between the father who consumed only 3%. Linking Words
In addition
, the homework exercise had a similar percentage with dressing but in a lower proportion.
Both parent and dad reached 70% for playing Linking Words
games
with children as the highest number consumed together. Use synonyms
While
there was the same rate for preparing for bed but lower than playing Linking Words
games
.Use synonyms
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