The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in1968 and in 2018

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in1968 and in 2018
The chart illustrates what families in one country spent weekly
income
for
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apply
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in 1968 and in 2018. It depicts 8 different
purpose
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purposes
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:
food
, housing, fuel and power, clothing and
footware
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footwear
,
household
goods
, personal
goods
, transport and
leisure
.
Overall
, most of
spending
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the spending
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show
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shows
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big
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a big
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change compared to 1968 and 2018,
while
household
goods
doesn't
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don't
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show any difference.  In 1968, families spent 35
percent
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per cent
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of their weekly
income
on
food
. 10% of expenses were used for housing and clothing and
footware
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footwear
. Fuel and power,
household
goods
, transport,
leisure
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and leisure
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were less than 10% of usage. In 2018, 23% of weekly
income
were
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was
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used for
leisure
.
Food
, housing and transport showed about 15 % of the
income
. Fuel and powder, clothing and
footware
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footwear
,
household
goods
and personal
goods
were spent less than 10% of that.
Food
took up the biggest expense In 1968,
while
in 2018,
leisure
had the hugest demand.
However
,
household
goods
showed the same amount of spending at about 8%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words income, food, household, goods, leisure with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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