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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams give information about the causative factors of agricultural downward productivity all over the world and the
three
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 affected regions with details in the 1990s.
Overall
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, the trend classifies the four main reasons for the
land
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 degradation into: overgrazing,
deforestation
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, overcultivation and others, where the overgrazing as the main cause. The data present in percentage and detailed description of the
three
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 additional regions were given: North
America
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,
Europe
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 and Oceania. At
first,
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the pie chart in 1999s witnessed overgrazing for all world agriculture as the most major effect for
land
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 became less productive by 35%. It is followed by
deforestation
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 by 30%
while
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 over-cultivation by 28% and the other factors resulted in only one fifth of the highest proportion.
On the other hand
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, the data from the table specifically segregated focusing on the
three
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 major reasons described previously within
three
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 given regions.
Europe
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 was significantly affected by 23% and followed by Oceania with 13% from the total
land
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while
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 North
America
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 showed the least affected by 5%.
In contrast
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 with the data for the overworld as similar as in Oceania’s
land
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 degradation
whereas
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 the overgrazing activities became the main culprit, both North
America
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 and
Europe
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 showed different results. In
Europe
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,
deforestation
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 had greatly affected almost half of the
land
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 productivity by 9.8%
while
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 over-cultivation in North
America
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 caused more than half of the affected
land
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 by 3.3%.
In contrast
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, no over cultivation but overgrazing by 11.3% over 13% in Oceania mainly caused the
land
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 degrade with the activity of
deforestation
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 by 1.7%

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words three, land, deforestation, america, europe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pie chart
  • Table
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Decreasing productivity
  • Reasons
  • Regional variations
  • Data
  • Summarize
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