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The illustrations show the alterations which took place at Queen Mary Hospital since its constructions in 1960.

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The illustrations show the alterations which took place at Queen Mary Hospital since its
constructions
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 in 1960. In general, a comparison of the three illustrations
show
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 the change
of
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in
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 area for each building. In 1960, the Queen Mary Hospital was divided into equal areas, but during the next 20
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year
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 the hospital experienced a number of dramatic changes. The most noticeable is that
shopping
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the shopping
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 centre was knocked down and
instead
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 of was built cancer centre.
Moreover
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,
development
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 was the facility of a hospital near the
rightside
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right
 of the cancer centre opened a pharmacy. As can be seen in 2000, only a hospital hasn't changed in the amount of area. The nursing school and the car park were cut in half
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 the development of the cancer
center
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. Only
pharmacy
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the pharmacy
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 and hospital
were remained
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remained
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