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The graph below gives information about the percentages of the population in four Asia countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentages of the population in four Asia countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the city
population
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percentage
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 in
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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, Malaysia, Thailand and
Indonesia
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 for the time period of 1970-2020 alongside some predictions for the next two decades.
Overall
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, the graph shows an increase in
population
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 for all the countries by 2040 as opposed to the percentages in 1970. In 1970, all the countries had the lowest
percentage
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 with
Indonesia
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 at the bottom at 15%, followed by Thailand at about 19%,
whereas
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 and Malaysia had the most
percentage
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 of
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population
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the population
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 at 30%. For the next two decades, all the states saw a rise in
population
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 in 1990, whereupon
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 took the lead at 49% and
Indonesia
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 at the lowest of 24%.
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,
Philippine's
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Philippines'
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percentage
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 dropped sharply,
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contrast
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Indonesia
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's
population
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 gained rapidly and both reached 42% in 2010. In fact,
Indonesia
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's growth is predicted to overtake the
Philippines
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's 50% spot by reaching 10% more in 2040. Yet, Malaysia consistently remains at the top with more than 80% of
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population
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the population
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 in 2040 and Thailand at the lowest with 45%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, percentage, philippines, indonesia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentages
  • population
  • Asia
  • countries
  • urban population
  • China
  • India
  • Japan
  • Indonesia
  • increased
  • decreasing
  • projected
  • predicted
  • peaked
  • declining
  • steadily
  • rate of increase
  • comparisons
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