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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?

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English
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 is known to be the universal
language
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 in the
world
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therefore
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 majority of the countries in the
world
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 speak
English
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 as their main
language
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 or even as their second
language
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. In the
country
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 am living in, learning
English
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 is considered valuable.
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The majority believe it's useful for their educational and career backgrounds to be used within the
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 or internationally.
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, in
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, I believe that learning
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 can be important the same as learning your mother tongue.
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 does not mean the local
language
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 should be disrespected. Any
person
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 living in their motherland should give first preference for their native
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 and
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 they can learn
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 as their second
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 in order to help them achieve their goals globally.
English
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 is a
language
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 which can be learned faster and easily. If a
person
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 is willing to pursue a higher education or start a career abroad,
English
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 will play a major role in their life.
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, a
person
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 who speaks only their native mother
language
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 will find it difficult to communicate with an individual who does speak only
English
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. As a
person
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 who comes from a Sinhala-speaking
country
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, I find
English
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a great tool to communicate with the rest of the
world
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 because Sri Lanka is the only Sinhala-speaking
country
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.
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, learning
English
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 should be encouraged within the school because
English
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 is paramount to a successful life. Learning
English
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 can allow people to overcome the
language
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 barrier with the rest of the
world
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 and to gain knowledge and access to global education. Many people in my
country
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 struggle to survive abroad
due to
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 a lack of
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 knowledge so schools must motivate kids from a younger age to pursue and learn the
English
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language
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 at least as their second
language
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while
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 preserving their local
language
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.
To conclude
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, as per my argument, I believe learning
English
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 can be as important as learning a local
language
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. It should be done combined
therefore
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 anyone can make their lives easy.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global communication
  • economic opportunities
  • cultural diversity
  • endangered
  • linguistic heritage
  • inclusive
  • multilingualism
  • language revitalization
  • language policy
  • language preservation
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