The line gra ph provides information about changes in food consumption by Chinese population in the years of 1985 to 2010.

The line
gra ph
Correct your spelling
graph
show examples
provides information about changes in food
consumption
by
Chinese
Correct article usage
the Chinese
show examples
population in the years
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
1985 to 2010.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that fish
consumption
had
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
fluctuated over the
period
and
then
it had a significant rise
at the end
of the
period
M oving
Correct your spelling
Moving
show examples
further
, it is
apparent ly
Correct your spelling
apparently
show examples
seen that c
onsumtion
Correct your spelling
consumption
of fish began to move upward rapidly around the
period
from 1995 to 2010.
Also
, despite the fact that
consumption
of salt did not have any shifts , compared to fish, we can see that it had experienced a gradual fall
at the end
of the year. On the one hand, it is
intere sting
Correct your spelling
interesting
show examples
to note that
consumption
of
meet
Correct your spelling
meat
show examples
had
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
slightly
rised
Correct your spelling
rose
over the same
period
as salt.
On the other hand
, it is evident that it did not
has
Change the verb form
have
show examples
any variations,
as well as
salt.
Submitted by dnm.best on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: