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The line gra ph provides information about changes in food consumption by Chinese population in the years of 1985 to 2010.

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The line
gra ph
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 provides information about changes in food
consumption
 by
Chinese
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the Chinese
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 population in the years
of
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1985 to 2010.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that fish
consumption
had
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fluctuated over the
period
 and
then
 it had a significant rise
at the end
 of the
period
M oving
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further
, it is
apparent ly
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apparently
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 seen that c
onsumtion
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consumption
 of fish began to move upward rapidly around the
period
 from 1995 to 2010.
Also
 , despite the fact that
consumption
 of salt did not have any shifts , compared to fish, we can see that it had experienced a gradual fall
at the end
 of the year. On the one hand, it is
intere sting
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 to note that
consumption
 of
meet
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meat
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had
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slightly
rised
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rose
 over the same
period
 as salt.
On the other hand
, it is evident that it did not
has
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 any variations,
as well as
 salt.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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