The pie charts provide information about rates of electricity consumption by raw materials in Australia and France between 1980 and 2000.

The pie charts provide information about rates of electricity consumption by raw materials in

Australia and France between 1980 and 2000.
The pie chart illustrates the five types of fuel sources consumed in
Australia
and
France
between the
year
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years
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1980 and 2000.
Overall
, In
Australia
, 50%
consumption
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is by coal and the
least
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lowest
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percentage by
oil
in 1980
although
, in
France
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France,
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it's divided among the five sources evenly. In the year
2000
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it's mainly coal
source
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sources
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accounting
130
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% in
Australia
and nuclear
power
having
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the major part in
France
with 126%.
Firstly
In
1980
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1980,
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Australia
have
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the major portion of coal with 50% and
rest
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the rest
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half is divided among the three sources with 20% natural
gas
, 20%
hydro
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hydropower
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power
and 10%
oil
in contract to 2000 which has 130% of it consumed by
the
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coal and rest of the total production is divided into 36%
hydro
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hydropower
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power
and 2% natural
gas
and 2%
oil
. In
France
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France,
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90 units
is
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sourced in 1980 which is divided between 25% coal, 25% natural
gas
, 20%
oil
,15% nuclear
power
and
remaining
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the remaining
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5% with
hydro
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hydropower
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power
in contrast
to the year 2000 which accounts
the
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major percentage of 126 with nuclear
power
and the
left over
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leftover
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units of the total are disturbed between 25% coal, 25%
oil
and 2% natural
gas
, 2% natural
gas
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, france, oil, power, gas with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "divided" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie charts
  • electricity consumption rates
  • raw materials
  • comparison
  • changes
  • overall trends
  • differences
  • Australia
  • France
  • 1980
  • 2000
  • information
  • rates
  • consumption
  • provides
  • between
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