Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
Nowadays, with the advancement of
the
technology Correct article usage
apply
children
are allowed to use gadgets Use synonyms
such
as smartphones. Many teenagers Linking Words
allocate
most of their days on their smartphones. Verb problem
spend
A long
screen time Correct article usage
Long
distract
students from focusing when studying and barrier Change the verb form
distracts
for
their social skills development. For me, Change preposition
to
this
trend is totally harmful Linking Words
for
them.
It is believed that gadgets Change the preposition
to
is
an additional tool to support Change the verb form
are
children
to succeed academically. In fact, a lot of Use synonyms
students
performance declined Change noun form
students'
student's
due to
technological expansion. many students are not able to divide attention when studying because of Linking Words
distraction
from phones. My sister Fix the agreement mistake
distractions
for example
, after school time, she Linking Words
suppose
to do her homework directly, so that she can utilize her time in the evening to take a rest. Wrong verb form
supposed
How ever
, she always finds it hard because she cannot refuse to scroll on Tiktok. Correct your spelling
However
As a result
, her Linking Words
overall
performance Linking Words
decline
Wrong verb form
declined
compare
to when she had no smartphone.
Another cost of Wrong verb form
compared
gadget
is it has Fix the agreement mistake
gadgets
limited
Wrong verb form
limit
Use synonyms
children
interaction with Change noun form
children's
people
around them. In the past, we rarely found Use synonyms
introvert
Replace the word
introverted
kids
, because most of them were forced to interact with Use synonyms
other
by playing or other social activities. Fix the agreement mistake
others
however
, nowadays the number of Linking Words
introvert
Replace the word
introverted
children
is increasing and technology Use synonyms
deserved
to be blamed for Wrong verb form
deserves
this
trend. Teenagers' interaction with Linking Words
people
around Use synonyms
around
them is limited Remove the redundancy
apply
due to
Linking Words
comfy
feeling that they Correct article usage
the comfy
received
from playing with their phones. Wrong verb form
receive
Linking Words
as
a result, many Capitalize word
As
kids
are not able to perform well in society Use synonyms
such
as feeling shy when meeting Linking Words
people
or cannot speak in front of many Use synonyms
people
.
In conclusion, Use synonyms
kids
using Use synonyms
gadget
could Fix the agreement mistake
gadgets
cost
a lot of disadvantages Verb problem
cause
such
as Linking Words
lack
of focus to study and slow development of social skills. Parents should take Correct article usage
a lack
this
issue seriously and forbid their Linking Words
kids
Use synonyms
in
using smartphones.Change preposition
from
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