The line graph gives information about a number of using of public transportation system by different ages and location of dwellers in 2016.
The graph illustrates a clear difference in the pattern of public the beginning to the other residents we can see that in
transport
utilisation between people who live in large cities
as well as
other citizens in 2018.
To summarize, it is evident that in large citizens transport
role is more crucial than the other residents.Thus
line utilisation in that area shows high degrees between adults as well as
youngsters.
To begin
with, the most popular ages of utilizing the transportation system is in several cases of ages. For example
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using
public Change preposition
of using
transport
between 0 and 30 has been popular in large cities
these degrees more than the other residents.
Furthermore
, we can see that the majority living in large cities
are not only popular among youngsters or adults but also
in this
graph shows 31 and 45 as this
argument significantly increased after several ages. As soon as according to
holders in this
type we can understand this
type of public transport
is not popular in large cities
as the line of this
dramatically decreased 10.
To sum up
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this
are majority not fond of utilising public transports. Since the lines of this
show dramatically decreasing during the period.Submitted by @ur_davrik
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