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Some people believe that government must apply high taxes to provide good public services for everyone. What is your opinion?

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Over a few decades, trillions of dollars in
taxes
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 have been collected by the governments of every nation. Still, satisfying improvement in the quality of
facilities
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 governments provide cannot be seen.
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, problems
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 as poverty, and unemployment come into existence enormously. In my opinion, applying high
taxes
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 may not be a suitable option. The government requires an alternative way to boost the economy, more manpower with job opportunities can be the best option.
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, unemployment will completely end, and the rise of the economic condition can be observed which will have a direct influence on the quality of government’s service.
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, Qatar is a tax-free country,
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 citizens get good
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 because their economy depends upon manpower.
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, priority towards the country's treasure only does not distribute the best
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, the leaders should not promote corruption. If the corrupt leader gets elected
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 the quality
facilities
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 are far away, and residents will not get the basic needs.
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, Sri Lanka has become bankrupt, and the residents are facing a financial crisis because of corrupt ministers.
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, collecting
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 is
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 crucial for a nation because we can see several countries like the USA, which implement more tax but provide much more discounts on hospitals
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 studies. Admittedly, people in developing countries cannot afford
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 so the idea of applying high
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 is not appropriate. In conclusion,
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 of collecting more
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, providing job opportunities
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 standing against corruption may be a better solution to uplift the finances of a nation which have a direct influence on better
facilities
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 given by the government.
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