The diagram belows shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

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This

diagram represents the manufacturing

process

for making

sugar

from

sugar

cane.

Sugar

is important for our daily use.

Overall

,the

sugar

cane is cultivated and harvested it is converted into

sugar

through various

process

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processes

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. In detail, there are seven steps to convert

sugar

cane to

sugar

. The growing period of

sugarcanes

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sugarcane

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is about 12 - 18 months periodically. Harvesting can be done by two methods

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mannually

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manually

and by mechinal harvesting. Manual harvesting takes

long

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time to

compelete

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complete

his

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work

whereas

mechinal

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mechanical

machinal

harvesting takes less time to complete

his

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work. After harvesting,

third

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process

is sugarcanes are crushed and

they

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produce juice.The juice is been purified and

are

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filtered

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fourth

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step involved. The sugarcane juice is heated and it

becames

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becomes

became

syrup. It is evaporated.

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method is centrifuge

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means

separates

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separating

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sugar

crystals from

syrup

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the syrup

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Last

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process

is drying and cooling here

sugar

is ready. From

this

, sugarcane is manufactured within a period of

18months

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18 months

and

produce

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sugar

for daily usage. There are

millions

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millions of

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tons of

sugar

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are

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produced from sugarcane. People consuming

sugar

in large

quantity

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quantities

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will cause

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apply

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health problems.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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4 paragraphs

182 words

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The diagram belows shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourist who visit such places?

Write a letter to a friend to inform him/her about a job opening in your company. Describe the job; 1) write about the job. 2) How is it suitable for your friend? 3) How to apply for the job.

In many parts of the world, some famous people are considered as ‘role models’ and they are having an increasing influence on the young. Is this a positive or negative development?

Nowadays many people have Access to computers on a wide basis and large number of children play computer games. What are the negative impacts of playing computer games and what can be done minimize bad effects?

Some people are of the opinion that children should be rewarded for good behaviour. Others think they should be punished for bad behavior. Discuss both views and give your personal opinion and reasons.