Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugars which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays many factories which

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produce

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food and

beverages

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beverage

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manufacture include numerous

amount

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amounts

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of

sugar

in

the

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their

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products

. It leads to spreading health problems among the customers. Prices on

this

category of

products

should be raised to make a downward

trend

of popularity

sugar

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products

to society. I completely agree with

this

statement.

Firstly

, many

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people all around the world consume

products

with a lot of

sugar

, but most of them realise a negative impact when they’ve already gotten diseases. Many of them spend a lot of time and money on treatments which support their previous health

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of life. It’s

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important to

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that there are many illnesses which can’t be treated at all and numerous

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people should use supportive therapy during all their

life

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. In

this

case, increasing

a

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price politic will help them to avoid

this problems

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,

being

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healthy and invest money in other useful directions.

Secondly

, if the companies will go up the prices of the

products

which include

sugar

in significant

amount

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amounts

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, the selling

trend

will decrease. Mostly, consumers highlighted the price of the product

whilen

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while

when

they decided to buy it. If the product with a cheaper price

before

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increases, the widest part of the audience will decide to stop buying

this

item.

Consequently

, it will generally lead to a downward

trend

of consumption of

sugar

among the group of people. In conclusion,

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companies should increase the prices of their

products

with a considerable amount of

sugar

.

This

action will spread a downward

trend

in selling product that includes

sugar

, reduce the numerous of disease and consume less

sugar

in general.