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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

There is a ubiquitous trend around the world, which is migration from rural
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 to
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. With
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 trend, rural
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 have witnessed a significant decrease in population. In my opinion, the disadvantages of urbanization outweigh the advantages
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 the slow progress in the countryside and excessive pressure on
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. Regarding economic development, urbanization depletes the rural workforce and stifles creativity in the countryside. To be more specific, with an increasing number of young people moving to metropolises, there is a limited labour force available in the countryside.
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, labour-intensive industries
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 as manufacturing and textile cannot flourish in rural
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, despite their low rent for large factories.
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, the absence of the young generation hinders the adoption of new technologies and productivity improvements.
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, in agriculture, young individuals may post videos of their farming practices on platforms like TikTok to attract buyers interested in the process of producing organic food.
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 creative promotion can lead to an increase in sales. Not only do rural
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 suffer
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 urbanization, but people in
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 grapple with intense competition and a decline in their quality of life. In terms of job hunting, urban residents need to compete with a larger population. For some fast-moving consumer goods companies,
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 as Nestle and P&G, it's not uncommon to have more than 100 applicants vying for a single internship position.
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, the high population density can lead to traffic congestion, pierce competition for access to educational institutes, and extended waiting time for medical appointments. I have seen pregnant women wait for up to 12 weeks for their first examination in Vancouver. In conclusion, the demographic shift between the urban and rural
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 is a negative development
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 its impact on both regions. In rural places, the lack of
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labourers
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 and creative minds leads to slow economic growth,
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 the influx of people in
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 results in fierce competition and a decline in living quality.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rural-to-urban migration
  • population shift
  • positive impact
  • negative impact
  • urbanization
  • job opportunities
  • access to education
  • access to healthcare
  • urban infrastructure
  • rural traditions
  • cultural heritage
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