The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the facilities of a major university in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the facilities of a major university in 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the
number
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of genders in varying departments (
such
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as Business, Law or Medicine) within an institution in 2012.
Overall
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, the
percentage
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of men was higher in four out of the seven faculties
thus
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leading them to be greater in
number
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than their opposite sex.
Firstly
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, men held the highest
percentage
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at just above 80% in Engineering
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the lowest for Education at around 25%.
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, In every other faculty it was above 50%,
however
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for Arts, the
percentage
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was below 50. Even
then
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, the
number
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of males
were
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greater
in
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average than the
number
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of females within the institution. In comparison, women dominated the Education sector with more than 70% and were higher in value over males in the Arts and Medicine department as well with 55% and 50%, respectively. Meanwhile, four out of the seven faculties still hired less than 50% of women. The lowest
percentage
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was under 20 and it was in the Engineering field.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender distribution
  • faculty
  • academic staff
  • proportion
  • disparity
  • trends
  • significance
  • broader societal trends
  • gender equality
  • university environment
  • implications
  • predominantly
  • minority
  • skewed
  • equal representation
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