The chart shows the proportion of working-age adults in four countries from 1960 to 2050 predicted.

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The figure illustrates the percentage of the

overall

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working age

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working-age

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adult population in four countries (

France

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United

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the United

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States, Japan,

Germany

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and Germany

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) from 1960 to 2050

expected

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apply

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Ovell

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Overall

, all four countries

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are forcasted

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forcasted

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forecasted

forecast

to decrease in 2050. At the start of the period Germany and Japan

was

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were

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the

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apply

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first and second places, respectively.

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France

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and

United

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the United

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States occupied

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last

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the last

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two positions, but

France

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was 3 percent higher.

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, in the

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they

all

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are all

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predicted to decrease. In 1960

percentage

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the percentage

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working

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the working

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age

popualtion

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population

in Japan was 65.

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it shows

steep

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rose and reached

it's

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its

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vertex at 70

percent

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per cent

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in 1990 and

falled

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fell

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dramatically and

predicted

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is predicted

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to continue

this

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trend. With

regart

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regard

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to Germany, which was at the top in 1960, shows

decrease

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a decrease

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by 1970, after it shows

increase

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an increase

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and reached

it's

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its

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highest point in 1990.

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However

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graphe

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grape

graph

graphene

shows

steady

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a steady

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deacrese

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decrease

and will

contunue

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continue

to fall.

France

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, which was third

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the row, demonstrates an increase, but

predicted

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is predicted

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to fall in the future and will occupy the second

postion

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position

portion

. Regarding the data shown by

United

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the United

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States, it is similar to

France

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, but will occupy the first place

at the end

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predicted

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the predicted

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period.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words france with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

192 words

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