The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie diagrams display the responses of different age groups regarding what makes them most happy. As an overview,
people
categorized into two different groups have different patterns of
happiness
factors
according to
their top three rankings. The survey showed participants who were under 30 years old found that their highest percentage is on receiving an achievement at work, doing hobbies, and having an attractive appearance with the number of 31%, 22%, and 18%, respectively. Similar to under 30 participants,
people
over 30 years old
also
receive their
happiness
by achieving goals at work and doing hobbies, by 32% and 24%.
Instead
of having a good appearance, respondents over 30 prefer to have financial stability as one of their three
happiness
factors. Placing on the
fourth ranking
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fourth-ranking
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, both age groups have
difference
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different
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happiness
factors.
Which
Correct pronoun usage
People
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people
under 30
have travelling
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travel
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,
on the other hand
,
people
over 30
received
Wrong verb form
receive
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happiness
from spending time with family.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, happiness with synonyms.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • age groups
  • responses
  • happiness factors
  • participants
  • contribute
  • compare
  • patterns
  • differences
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