The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie diagrams display the responses of different age groups regarding what makes them most happy. As an overview,

people

categorized into two different groups have different patterns of

happiness

factors

according to

their top three rankings. The survey showed participants who were under 30 years old found that their highest percentage is on receiving an achievement at work, doing hobbies, and having an attractive appearance with the number of 31%, 22%, and 18%, respectively. Similar to under 30 participants,

people

over 30 years old

also

receive their

happiness

by achieving goals at work and doing hobbies, by 32% and 24%.

Instead

of having a good appearance, respondents over 30 prefer to have financial stability as one of their three

happiness

factors. Placing on the

fourth ranking

Add a hyphen

fourth-ranking

show examples

, both age groups have

difference

Replace the word

different

show examples

happiness

factors.

Which

Correct pronoun usage

People

show examples

people

under 30

have travelling

Wrong verb form

travel

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on the other hand

people

over 30

received

Wrong verb form

receive

show examples

happiness

from spending time with family.

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