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The world of work is changing rapidly and people cannot depend on the same job or same conditions of work for life. Discuss the possible causes for these changes and give your suggestions on how people should prepare for work in the future.

There is an opinion that earning money for a living is becoming more and more challenging in
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 high-quality online education, the level of competition has dramatically increased over the
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 decade. Each individual nowadays is able to change their occupation in a matter of months
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 of online universities and schools
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, it takes approximately eighteen months to become a marketing management professional or a UX/UI designer from scratch, so a
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, the development of the IT industry, in general, exerts severe pressure on the labour market. A
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 of jobs have been partly or fully superseded by
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different machines
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, huge manufacturers like Dyson or TSMC have a tendency to build fully autonomous factories without people at all.
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humankind should be prepared for the dramatic changes in the future.
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 can be clearly seen that the labour market will never be the same. Bearing in mind all the aforementioned changes, people should concentrate on soft skills development and assess their own risks of being out of work with a cold heart. Fortunately, all these tech changes give not only drawbacks but a
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 of advantages too, and our duty to harness them as fully as possible.

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structure
Make a clear plan. In each paragraph, show one main idea and tie it to the task goal. End with a strong closing line that says what to do next.
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Link cause and effect more clearly. Show how one change leads to the need to learn a new skill.
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Add real and simple examples from work life. Use ideas that are easy to see and easy to read.
language
Use short, simple sentences. Check grammar and spelling. Avoid long or hard words.
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The essay keeps the topic clear: changes in work life and how to get ready.
structure
It uses a 'To sum up' line to show the end.
content
The idea to keep soft skills is good.
Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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