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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010.
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The
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bar chart demonstrates how the donations among different
aged
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ages
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people
 changed in Britain in 2010 compared to 1990.
Overall
, there was a decreasing trend in giving money to
charity
 in Britain for
population
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the population
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who
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aged from 18 to 50,
while
 individuals over 50 illustrated
gradual
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a gradual
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 increase in two decades. The most striking feature of the chart is about 42% of
people
 aged 36-50 made the
most
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largest
charity
 among
British
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 population in 1990.
However
, after twenty years
this
 figure lost
dominating
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 position, and
its
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 showed a decrease of around 7%. At the same time, the lowest percentage did young individuals,
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 from about 17% to 6%.
In addition
, adults from 26-30
also
 reduced giving money to
charity
 throughout two decades.
Finally
,
this
 trend was converse for
people
 aged over 50. Namely, approximately 38% of
people
 aged 50-65 started to give money to
charity
,
while
population
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the population
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 over 65 increased
donation
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donations
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 from around 32% to 35%
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, charity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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