Excessive traffic has made cities unpleasant places to live and work in. For this reason, private cars should be completely banned from city centers. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

In megapolis cities a
lot
of problems with
traffic
and
cause
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because
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of
this
people possibly do not
want
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live there. There is
extent
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an extent
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that
this private
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this private car
these private cars
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cars
should be restricted from city
centers
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centres
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. I do not agree with
this
and in essay will give different arguments and give examples for
this
.
Firstly
, excessive
car
traffics
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traffic
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actually not caused by simple citizens, because there are a
lot
of cities which
suffers
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suffer
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from
this
problem
.
However
, there are
also
cities that
bigger
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are bigger
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but do not have a
lot
of
traffics
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traffic
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. Evidently, it is not a
problem
of
huge
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a huge
the huge
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number of
cars
. There is another reason,
infostructure
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the infostructure
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of
citites
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cities
and
this
is not from citizens, it is from governments or
in other words
the scheme and planning of the
citi's
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city's
road locations
was
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were
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not correct and of course need to be changed.
Secondly
, the
traffic
causes
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caused
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from
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by
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not an amount of
cars
. There may be a single
car
that stops all
cars
cause of
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causing
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accidents
in
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on
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the long highway. There are a
lot
of examples
for
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of
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this
.
For example
,
in
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on
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roads
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the roads
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there may be
situation
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the situation
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, one
car
's
petroul
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petrol
ended
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ends
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and
this
car
will stop
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stops
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the whole
duzens
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dozens
dozen
of
cars
or
other
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another
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example is the
lightoff
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light off
, because
traffic
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the traffic
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light
also
will off and there will be huge
traffic
on
roads
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the roads
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. In conclusion, I want to say that
traffic
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the traffic
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problem
is
firstly
from
government
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the government
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,
that
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which
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did infostructure for the city and
then
the
problem
of people, so it is not smart to blame the owners of private
cars
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Emissions
  • Air pollution
  • Global warming
  • Noise pollution
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Public transportation
  • Green spaces
  • Urban residents
  • Enforcing the ban
  • Exceptions
  • Mental well-being
  • Healthier lifestyles
  • Local businesses
  • Tourism
  • Offset the need
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