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Excessive traffic has made cities unpleasant places to live and work in. For this reason, private cars should be completely banned from city centers. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In megapolis cities a
lot
 of problems with
traffic
 and
cause
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because
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 of
this
 people possibly do not
want
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want to
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 live there. There is
extent
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an extent
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 that
this private
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this private car
these private cars
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cars
 should be restricted from city
centers
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centres
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. I do not agree with
this
 and in essay will give different arguments and give examples for
this
.
Firstly
, excessive
car
traffics
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traffic
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 actually not caused by simple citizens, because there are a
lot
 of cities which
suffers
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suffer
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 from
this
problem
.
However
, there are
also
 cities that
bigger
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are bigger
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 but do not have a
lot
 of
traffics
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traffic
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. Evidently, it is not a
problem
 of
huge
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a huge
the huge
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 number of
cars
. There is another reason,
infostructure
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the infostructure
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 of
citites
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cities
 and
this
 is not from citizens, it is from governments or
in other words
 the scheme and planning of the
citi's
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city's
 road locations
was
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were
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 not correct and of course need to be changed.
Secondly
, the
traffic
causes
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caused
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from
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by
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 not an amount of
cars
. There may be a single
car
 that stops all
cars
cause of
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causing
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 accidents
in
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on
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 the long highway. There are a
lot
 of examples
for
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of
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this
.
For example
,
in
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on
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roads
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the roads
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 there may be
situation
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the situation
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, one
car
's
petroul
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petrol
ended
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ends
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 and
this
car
will stop
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stops
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 the whole
duzens
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dozens
dozen
 of
cars
 or
other
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another
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 example is the
lightoff
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light off
, because
traffic
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the traffic
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 light
also
 will off and there will be huge
traffic
 on
roads
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the roads
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. In conclusion, I want to say that
traffic
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the traffic
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problem
 is
firstly
 from
government
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the government
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,
that
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which
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 did infostructure for the city and
then
 the
problem
 of people, so it is not smart to blame the owners of private
cars
.
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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly states your position on the topic.
coherence cohesion
Organize your essay into paragraphs to improve coherence and readability.
lexical resource
Use more varied vocabulary to enhance your lexical resource.
grammatical range accuracy
Make sure to use appropriate verb tenses and subject-verb agreement.
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