The graph below shows the alcohol-related deaths in 7 different countries and the average beer consumption in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting description of the correlation of the table that follow. Write at least 150 words.

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The graph provides information on the death rate related to alcohol around the world in seven different countries in 2005

as well as

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the average consumption of beer in 2002.

Overall

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, it is evident that the highest amount of

deaths

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was registered in the

Czech

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Republic

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together with

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the highest consumption of beer.

Furthermore

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, alcohol-related

deaths

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were more popular among men than women in all of the countries. On top of the ranking are the number of

deaths

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in the

Czech

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Republic

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, which were significantly higher than for other countries

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the amount of litres consumed per capita indicated to be the highest.

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, the highest amount of

deaths

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among women were registered there.

Conversely

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, among men, the highest rate was seen in Germany, which was the second highest in terms of

deaths

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with more than a million. In Austria, numbers were lower,

however

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, the consumption of beer was indicated to be above 100 litres similar to Germany, the

Czech

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Republic

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and Ireland.

Nevertheless

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deaths

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in Ireland were only half of those in the

Czech

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Republic

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. In terms of the lowest rating, it was registered in Lithuania with just above 100

thousand

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100,000

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, respectively, following the 382 thousand

deaths

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in Estonia.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Accurate linking words

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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204 words

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