The graph below shows the alcohol-related deaths in 7 different countries and the average beer consumption in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting description of the correlation of the table that follow. Write at least 150 words.
The graph provides information on the death rate related to alcohol around the world in seven different countries in 2005
as well as
the average consumption of beer in 2002. Overall
, it is evident that the highest amount of deaths
was registered in the Czech
Republic
together with
the highest consumption of beer. Furthermore
, alcohol-related deaths
were more popular among men than women in all of the countries.
On top of the ranking are the number of deaths
in the Czech
Republic
, which were significantly higher than for other countries as well as
the amount of litres consumed per capita indicated to be the highest. In addition
, the highest amount of deaths
among women were registered there.
Conversely
, among men, the highest rate was seen in Germany, which was the second highest in terms of deaths
with more than a million. In Austria, numbers were lower, however
, the consumption of beer was indicated to be above 100 litres similar to Germany, the Czech
Republic
and Ireland. Nevertheless
, deaths
in Ireland were only half of those in the Czech
Republic
.
In terms of the lowest rating, it was registered in Lithuania with just above 100 thousand
Correct your spelling
100,000
deaths
, respectively, following the 382 thousand deaths
in Estonia.Submitted by katja.otavina on
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