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The graph below shows the amount of UK investments in clean energy from 2008 to 2015.

The graph below shows the amount of UK investments in clean energy from 2008 to 2015.
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The
given
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apply
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bar chart illustrates how much money
invest
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was invested
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 in each source of clean
enregy
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energy
 in
UK
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the UK
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 over an eight-year period. Looking at the
overall
 perspective, it is apparent that the amount of
investment
 went up
reveiwing
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reviewing
 the given period.
Moreover
, wind projects absorbed a great deal of
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the budeget
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budeget
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budget
budgets
 from 2008 to 2010 and after 2011, both solar and wind projects accounted for more than half of
total
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the total
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investment
. With regard to the total
investment
 amount, it began with around 2.5
billion
pounds
 in 2008 and after
a
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apply
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going up to 7.5
billion
pounds
, it
remains
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remained
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 roughly unchanged between
interval
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intervals
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 of 7.5 and 8.0 from 2010 to 2012. The graph witnessed a steady
up ward
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upward
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 trend starting
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with the
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the
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a
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 value of just below 10
billion
pounds
 in 2013, followed by 12
billion
pounds
 in 2014.
Finally
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Finally,
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 the bar chart indicates that the
investment
 reached a peak of 15
billion
pounds
 in 2015.
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