the line graph shows the changes in the populationes of six different areas of the world bwtween 1960 and 2010.
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illustations
the number of Correct your spelling
illustrates
people
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in
areas
of the global
between 1960 and 2010.
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globe
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, the figer
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figure
of
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people
rised
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In1960, the number of populations
in Europe & Central and South Asia
was similar around 750 millions
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but after next years, South Asia
had a significant increase so the people
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Asia
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from
to2010
, the Correct your spelling
to 2010
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East
Asia
&Pacitic
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Pacific
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