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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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With the advancement of digital technology, digital devices and the internet, many
poeple
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people
 can have access to all news, knowledge and information all around the world faster than the conventional ways like
newspapers
 and
books
.
Therefore
, I agree that because of easy access to
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people
 will tend to move on from reading the papers to reading them online
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on
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 the internet. Nowadays, almost everyone carries a
smart phone
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smartphone
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 or a smart device with them.
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 of schools and companies have embraced the new technology and it has made everyone's work much easier. Today,
people
 do not need to carry
note
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books
 or papers to
school
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 or to work, as they can note down on
thier
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their
laptos
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laptops
laptop
 or tablets. Even many
books
 are now available in PDF forms, so
instead
 of carrying all the
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books
 to school, students can take their laptops to school.
This
 applies to the
habbit
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habit
 of reading
newspapers
. Now lot of
newspapers
 publish
thier
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their
newspapers
 on their websites and if not many news channels broadcast their news presentation on "
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" or
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 their website so
people
 do not have to go out
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 to buy them.
Furthermore
,
books
 are
also
 available in the form of audiobooks.
This
 is very efficient for
people
 with busy schedules
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 because they can listen to those
books
while
 they are travelling or doing household
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. There are even apps for
reseach
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research
 papers in the form of audiobooks.
To conclude
, because of the
protability
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portability
probability
, not taking much space and the easy approach
people
 will use the internet to gather the information they need in the future.
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  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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