In most countries multinational companies and their products are becoming more and more important. This trend is seriously damaging our quality of life.

Free trade agreements in several regions
in
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the world abolish trade
constraint
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through
taxes
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reducing
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or permission
simplifying
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.
Therefore
, national
companies
may opt to transform into multinational
companies
for gaining
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better opportunities by augmenting product traffic.
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, it is plausible that some impending problems may occur
due to
high
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intensity of commodity
traffics
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. I condemn the restriction of international trade development because of
human's
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life sustainability.
First,
high traffic of commodities may bolster economic development through investment mechanisms.
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, automotive multinational
companies
who
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invest
in particular
countries may bring a high amount of funds, job opportunities, and knowledge.
Maneuvering
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integral mechanisms dictated by the government is the key
for
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achieving the goals
to enhance
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economic growth through the mechanism.
Second,
detrimental problems may benign a human's life. The high
traffics
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of commodities sometimes could lead to antitrust in markets, but the government itself has rigid regulation to prevail
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this problems
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.
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,
swindle
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companies
who
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sell harmful aesthetic products have been thwarted by
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in certain countries.
Thus
, the reason for averting danger to
human's
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life may not be acceptable. In conclusion, the stimulation of multinational
companies
may be laudable to be extended.
While
,
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the government assigned a regulation for protecting both of them and avoiding err.
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