In most countries multinational companies and their products are becoming more and more important. This trend is seriously damaging our quality of life.
Free trade agreements in several regions
in
the world abolish trade Change preposition
of
constraint
through Fix the agreement mistake
constraints
taxes
Fix the agreement mistake
tax
reducing
or permission Replace the word
reduction
simplifying
. Replace the word
simplification
Therefore
, national companies
may opt to transform into multinational companies
for gaining
better opportunities by augmenting product traffic. Change preposition
to gain
But
, it is plausible that some impending problems may occur Correct word choice
However
due to
high
intensity of commodity Correct article usage
the high
traffics
. I condemn the restriction of international trade development because of Correct subject-verb agreement
traffic
human's
life sustainability.
Change noun form
human
First,
high traffic of commodities may bolster economic development through investment mechanisms. For example
, automotive multinational companies
who
invest Correct pronoun usage
that
in particular
countries may bring a high amount of funds, job opportunities, and knowledge. Maneuvering
integral mechanisms dictated by the government is the key Change the spelling
Manoeuvring
for
achieving the goals Change preposition
to
to enhance
economic growth through the mechanism.
Change preposition
of enhancing
Second,
detrimental problems may benign a human's life. The high traffics
of commodities sometimes could lead to antitrust in markets, but the government itself has rigid regulation to prevail Change the verb form
traffic
Change preposition
over this
this problems
. Change the determiner
this problem
these problems
For example
, swindle
Replace the word
swindling
companies
who
sell harmful aesthetic products have been thwarted by Correct pronoun usage
that
bylaw
in certain countries. Fix the agreement mistake
bylaws
Thus
, the reason for averting danger to human's
life may not be acceptable.
In conclusion, the stimulation of multinational Change noun form
human
companies
may be laudable to be extended. While
,
the government assigned a regulation for protecting both of them and avoiding err.Remove the comma
apply
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