The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts compare different factors affecting the happiness of two age groups, which are under and above 30 years old.
Overview, work accomplishment and doing hobbies are two common reasons making
people
of all ages happy. While
people
aged under 30 cares more about their appearance, the other group focuses more on their financial capability.
To begin
with, work achievement is what makes people
happy the most, accounting for over 30% of all indivduals
taking part in the survey. Correct your spelling
individuals
This
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people
below 30 and above 30, respectively.
However
, these two groups of age also
have different concerns that can impact their happy feeling. Appearance and travelling are important to individuals under 30, accounting for 18% and 15%. In contrast
, 20 % of people
aged over 30 think that financial security and 14% of them consider being able to spend time with family make them happy.Submitted by duongngocminh260801 on
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