Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. Do you agree or disagree?

Some
people
choose to be a vegan or a person who
choose
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to not eat
meat
or fish. They do believe that their action will make their body healthier and
also
make a better world.In my point of view,
this
is a great option
to
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for
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people
who need to reduce their
meat
consumption and want to try a different
lifestyle
. First and foremost,
people
with
vegan
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lifestyle
is often mistaken for not taking any protein in their meal. In fact, they consume
plant based
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protein as a substitution.
For instance
, a person who
choose
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chooses
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to not eat any
meat
product so they take tofu
instead
. They do believe that
plant based
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plant-based
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product
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products
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can be healthy for their skin. In some case,
people
with
certain
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type of diet is
people
who can not eat
meat
and/or
diary
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dairy
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products, either they are allergic to the food or restricted by their doctor.
This
means that
people
who used to eat
meat
or fish need to change their habits. On one hand,
people
with
vegan
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a vegan
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lifestyle
is often judged
other
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by other
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people
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people's
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habits for eating
meat
or fish product. They do believe that killing animal
are
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is
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rude and not respecting the animal itself.
On the other hand
, most
people
believe it is fine to have different habits than the
other
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others
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as long as it does not bother anyone.
To conclude
,
people
can choose which kind of
lifestyle
they want and they believe is the best. Most important,
people
should choose a
lifestyle
that
suit
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them the best.
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