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Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. Do you agree or disagree?

#meat #diet
Some
people
 choose to be a vegan or a person who
choose
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 to not eat
meat
 or fish. They do believe that their action will make their body healthier and
also
 make a better world.In my point of view,
this
 is a great option
to
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for
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people
 who need to reduce their
meat
 consumption and want to try a different
lifestyle
. First and foremost,
people
 with
vegan
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a vegan
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lifestyle
 is often mistaken for not taking any protein in their meal. In fact, they consume
plant based
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 protein as a substitution.
For instance
, a person who
choose
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chooses
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 to not eat any
meat
 product so they take tofu
instead
. They do believe that
plant based
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plant-based
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product
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products
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 can be healthy for their skin. In some case,
people
 with
certain
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a certain
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 type of diet is
people
 who can not eat
meat
 and/or
diary
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dairy
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 products, either they are allergic to the food or restricted by their doctor.
This
 means that
people
 who used to eat
meat
 or fish need to change their habits. On one hand,
people
 with
vegan
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a vegan
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lifestyle
 is often judged
other
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by other
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people
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people's
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 habits for eating
meat
 or fish product. They do believe that killing animal
are
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is
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 rude and not respecting the animal itself.
On the other hand
, most
people
 believe it is fine to have different habits than the
other
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others
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 as long as it does not bother anyone.
To conclude
,
people
 can choose which kind of
lifestyle
 they want and they believe is the best. Most important,
people
 should choose a
lifestyle
 that
suit
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 them the best.
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