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Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. Do you agree or disagree?

#meat #diet
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Some
people
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 choose to be a vegan or a person who
choose
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 to not eat
meat
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 or fish. They do believe that their action will make their body healthier and
also
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 make a better world.In my point of view,
this
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 is a great option
to
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for
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people
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 who need to reduce their
meat
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 consumption and want to try a different
lifestyle
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. First and foremost,
people
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 with
vegan
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a vegan
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lifestyle
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 is often mistaken for not taking any protein in their meal. In fact, they consume
plant based
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plant-based
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 protein as a substitution.
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, a person who
choose
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 to not eat any
meat
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 product so they take tofu
instead
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. They do believe that
plant based
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plant-based
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product
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products
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 can be healthy for their skin. In some case,
people
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 with
certain
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a certain
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 type of diet is
people
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 who can not eat
meat
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 and/or
diary
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dairy
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 products, either they are allergic to the food or restricted by their doctor.
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 means that
people
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 who used to eat
meat
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 or fish need to change their habits. On one hand,
people
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 with
vegan
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a vegan
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lifestyle
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 is often judged
other
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by other
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people
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people's
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 habits for eating
meat
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 or fish product. They do believe that killing animal
are
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is
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 rude and not respecting the animal itself.
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, most
people
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 believe it is fine to have different habits than the
other
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others
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 as long as it does not bother anyone.
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,
people
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 can choose which kind of
lifestyle
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 they want and they believe is the best. Most important,
people
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 should choose a
lifestyle
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 that
suit
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suits
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 them the best.
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