People who go to live in other countries, should follow the customs and traditions of the new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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society move to another
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by following for different purposes in life.
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is an opinion that the culture of a new agrarian should be followed by all individuals who want to live in that place. I agree with
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statement because it shows respect to the
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and helps to familiarize with the surroundings. Respecting the customs is the same as respecting the bucolic. In a new place, you are the one who decides what to do,
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by following customs and
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,
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around can see your attitude toward them and toward their
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as well.
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, easter is celebrated in the USA and
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custom can increase the positive attitude of society
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sincere respect for
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, performing national culture provides fast adaptiveness to the new place. As all
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are the heritage of hundreds of countries, following them could maintain the understanding of the history, mentality and values of a
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. The eastern tradition Nauryz is a great example of a custom that reflects the
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's values and
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which can help to familiarize with a new society and environment.
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, it is highly recommended to
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who moved for a long term life to perform the other rustic's ethic,
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being respected and to be familiarized with the new environment
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural assimilation
  • integration
  • traditions
  • customs
  • identity
  • diversity
  • tolerance
  • heritage
  • intercultural
  • enrichment
  • alienate
  • segregate
  • dialogue
  • uniformity
  • assimilate
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