The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate various things that make
people
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under 30 and over 30 most happy.
Overall
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, it can be seen that work achievements make most adults happy in both charts.
However
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, other factors bottom out.
According to
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the materials, achievements at work
prevailing
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prevailed
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in both circle diagrams, at 31% and 32% respectively. A
further
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22%
is
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are
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doing hobbies for
people
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under 30 and 24% for
over
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those over
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30. It is
also
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worth mentioning that having a good appearance and financial security is
also
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significant for
people
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, reaching 18% and 20% respectively. It can be seen from the data that travelling is less important, 15%, and other factors hit a low of 14
percent
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per cent
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for
people
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under 30. As for the elder group, being with a family reaches a peak of 14%,
whereas
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other factors are only
of
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apply
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10%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • age groups
  • responses
  • happiness factors
  • participants
  • contribute
  • compare
  • patterns
  • differences
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