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Some people believe that technology has led to many positive developments in their lives, while others think technology is gradually taking over control of the way people live. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays new technologies
is
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the
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 crucial part of our
lives
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. Some
people
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 argue that technological advancement
have
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 changed their
lives
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 positively, at the same
time
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 others feel that technology
start
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 to control their
lives
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. In
this
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 essay, I will overview both opinions and give my own in the conclusion.
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 with, technological developments
helps
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 to make
people
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's
lives
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 easier. Currently, it is hard to realise our
live
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 without computers and smartphones .
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 , three or four decades earlier
people
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 couldn't imagine communicating with
people
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 from different countries
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 be so easy , but for modern
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people
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people,
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 it is nothing special.
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,
invention
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the invention
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 of home gadgets helps
housewife's
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safe
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 their
time
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 and energy and spend
this
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time
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for
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self treatment
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.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 still have an opinion that new technologies have a negative influence on our lifestyle
,
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moreover
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, control it.
This
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 is because today more and more individuals, especially youngsters, spend their
time
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 online , rather than
communicationg
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communicating
communication
 in real life.
Population
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 are influenced
with
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information
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the information
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 they see or read
in
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on
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 social media . Some items , like washing
machine
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machines
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 or vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 are now vital. Individuals become addicted
from
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to
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technologies
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technology
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, In conclusion,
although
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people
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 today became dependent
from
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on
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 some technological items, my
opinions
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opinion
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 is that there are more positive aspects , like convenience and
time
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-saving, than negative. It is a personal choice of everyone ,
use
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 gadgets to make our life easier , or be controlled or addicted.
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